The cave, deep, dark
and normal
The light, blinding,
pain and truthful
Born in the dark,
knowing no different
Own reality as real
as my hand chained to the wall
Freedom, dragged from
the abyss
To where I do not comprehend
Flash, bang, knowledge,
enlightenment
Pupils contract on a
fantastic dream
Must return home to
enlighten others
New reality is so
wonderful
Wait they can’t
understand my gift to them
Just another shadow
on the wall
Reality is cement,
Chaining us to our
own perceptions
Dang Shane, Your poem is really good. I like the rhythm you set, and the short bursts illustrate how thoughts work in our heads. The pacing and style of the poem really complemented the message you were trying to send, and I'll come back to read the rest of your poetry for sure.
ReplyDeleteThe quote at the top of your blog really got me thinking. Thanks for that. I really like the background of your profile too. Plato believed that every individual has a responsibility to society. Do you? why or why not? http://emarquezrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteYour sonnet is really good!
ReplyDeleteHow do you plan on studying for the final?
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Although our sonnets differed in the way they were set up I still liked yours, the descriptive words give me a good vision of what you were trying to say
ReplyDeleteWow! That is intense. Job well done! "Pupils contract on a fantastic dream" that is my favorite line. Your imagery and passion strung throughout the sonnet are extraordinary.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the structure and way in which you approached the assignment. It was different and lovely to read. The word choice created excellent imagery. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWell, there was a lack of rhyming... But other than that, this reminded me of an intense opening to a movie. I guess however without the rhyme scheme this isn't a sonnet... You have figurative language down pat though.
ReplyDeleteYour blog has an interesting background. What is that?
Do you think Charles Dickens was a nice man?
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That inner-poet of yours is beautiful man! I love the first-person perspective to being a resident of Plato's Cave! Do you believe in an "abyss" somewhere on earth that embodies the Cave?
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Dude, that was intense! It was a great buildup of suspense, words, and imagery! Great sonnet!
ReplyDeleteGreat blog dude! Your background is great as well dude! How are you studying for the final? Let me know! http://lvalenzuelarhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/
Nice usage of vocabulary and imagery! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe layout of your blog is really cool and awesome! So, what are you planning on doing for the final presentation?
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Wow, your sonnet was really enticing. I really liked the twist you put at the end with the prisoner saying they wouldn't understand. Good job, you should definitely write more!
ReplyDeleteI also really like your blog layout, one question though... whatsup with huntman??
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Your sonnet was very well written! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteWhat do you think your plans are for our final? Both vocabulary and the big presentation?
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